Blackwater Tales

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The Secret Keepers (Black Water Tales Book 1)

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...This story lacks a certain something, and by page three I was certain it was an editor and proofreader....

I started skimming over the first sentence and had to force myself to go back and actually read. There is a difference between lyrical prose and purple prose and this has some nice phrases drowning in a purple tide. Soap is “countless gushes of pink foam”. Outside work is “outside of the pressure cooker, mile a minute environment, in which the both of them spent their time”.

(Being a horror reader I tend to encounter certain phrases in their literal sense: e.g. “the Lonely room swallowed her whole.” had me identifying her as our victim for the book only to realise on the next line it was metaphorical. I admit to disappointment.)

This story lacks a certain something, and by page three I was certain it was an editor and proofreader. Certain errors with speech punctuation on page two had already snapped me out of the story. “Dr Younghill snapped while popping cheese squares…”. This sounds fine, but there’s a full stop at the end of the preceding speech and no comma after snapped, so what did he snap? Or did he himself snap? Forgive me, purple prose has this effect on my reviews.

“It was those, carefree, verging on sexual harassment comments that made him so damn likeable to people he worked with.” And that sentence nearly made me put the book down on page 2. I have not corrected the grammar. The sentiment speaks for itself. All previous examples have come from before that point.

I skimmed some more. I got to page five where there was a scene break with no formatting change at all. The book changes location and point of view literally from one paragraph to the next. I scanned ahead to find the next such break on page 8, again with no formatting corrections.

On the bright side it has a table of contents which linked to the menu, and a good horror cover that made me pick it up. On the downside, this book really needs an editor, a proofreader, and a formatter.

Rating: DNF
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Discussion

sliara (9 March 2021)
It seems like a boring book to begin with. I don't think I would want to read it based on your observation. You can tell though if the book is interesting if the description in the back of the book would make you want to buy it.

nangk08 (11 March 2021)
The examples of purple prose as used in the book that you have mentioned in the review is enough to put anyone off this book!

luri (1 April 2021)
I wish I had checked the book a little earlier because the book was being offered for free until March 24th. However, after reading this review, who wants to read the book. But then everyone has his or her own view. You may dislike it but I might like it, who knows!

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