Great idea but the execution needs an editor and fact-checker to become a goodbook.

The feeling I get from the writing is unpolished. There are many places where an editor could have tightened things up, or where the plot is abandonedfor character background for pages at a time. Exclamation marks crop up in some odd places, and occur frequently outside text.

There are a few show don’t tell issues, namely large amounts of telling and unnecessary exposition. For example, instead of entire paragraphs tellingus what some one replies each time he is asked a question, why not have someone ask the question, and let him give the answer. This book needs aneditor, and I do not just mean in the nonsensical sentence way. On local 182 pg 10 and 228 pg 14 we are told about her naming her Irish setter Watson,but the events where it happens are years apart. Pg 16 has someone say the same statement two ways, which reads oddly.

Procedural fans should give it a miss, when the P.I is asked to take the fingerprints by the police and bag body parts, adherence to realism isn’tgoing to be a focus in the book. I didn’t finish it.